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 Eudora Spitznogle - Novice, August 12th
Eudora Spitznogle
 Posted: Jun 27 2017, 11:03 AM
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"Guess who's back in the house heels click-clackin' about"

AGE:
80
YEAR:
Potions Master
HOUSE:
Slytherin HoH
CLASH:
Headmistress
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5'8"
STATUS:
Muggle-Born
POSTS:
166
Rep: 9 pts [ + | - ]

Eudora Spitznogle
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Awards: 26



Rank Applying For: Beginner
Link to character workshop topic: Workshop Topic
At least two of your recent role play topics:
Double Double Toil and Trouble - Elizabeth Wells
An Attitude Of Altitude And Probity By Which To Abide - Uriah Dorian
In these topics I've worked mainly on establishing relationships with members of staff that Eudora would have taught during her tenure as a Hogwarts Professor. I've also used them as ways to set up Eudora's general behavior patterns and thought processes.

OWL Class - Students
Eudora hasn't had the opportunity to interact in her classes yet, but her class topics give some pretty good insight into how I use dialogue with her. This post in particular is dialogue heavy.

Commentary: Eudora is a character I've worked on for a long time, since before my time at WURR, and while she had started as my secondary character she has quickly morphed into my primary character, which is why she is the first character I am ranking. I feel like I know her pretty well, but I sometimes have trouble sticking to the script when I'm writing her. I have received a lot of positive feedback on her from other writers, but I know my writing ability isn't the strongest so I'd really like to improve that as well.

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Martín Marzán
 Posted: Jun 27 2017, 11:11 AM
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"Man up, you gigantic disappointment - Zeus"

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Brandy Sage
 Posted: Jul 10 2017, 05:05 AM
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"i have problems with authority"

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Hey Bubbles! I’m sure you know me by now but I’m Puzzles and I’m going to be your first reviewer today. Now before we get down to the nitty gritty here I’m going to go over some of the requirements for beginner here for you. Ready? Let’s go!

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What we're looking for:

  • At least 4 posts by your character over 2 threads. Your most recent post must be made within three months of the date of your application.
  • Have your character profile in the workshop with at least one revision of each section posted by you. (If you choose not to include an appearance section at sorting, you must include it when you post your workshop profile, and then provide a subsequent revision for this rank).
  • At the beginner rank, we are focused on building up your character. We will give you suggestions on how to expand your profiles and posts, particularly in regards to content, in order to gain as complete a picture of your character as possible. We're looking for a general grasp of grammar (punctuation, paragraphs, apostrophes, etc.) and spelling, and that you follow the rules by giving us at least five lines per post. Additionally, we'd like to see that you have made an effort to expand all areas of the profile (i.e. not just personality or not just history).


Everything looks good on this end, let’s get this party started, shall we?

Diving straight in, let’s have a peak at her appearance. So we have an okay foundation here, looking more at the basics without getting into too much depth. I can get a pretty good picture of Eudora but I want more than a picture. I want a moving gif or, better yet, a whole garsh darn movie. I’m greedy okay, just deal with it.

See this:

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Her hair is bright red and often configured in a haphazard poof, frizzy curls sticking out in all directions


I love it. The descriptive language here is fabulous. Now, what I you to do is take this and add this level of detail to every inch of your character. And don’t be afraid to delve into other things here. Does she have any unique mannerisms? What does it look like when she walks or runs? What about when she emotes? Eudora is such a fabulous, bright character and I want to see you do her real justice here. We have a hollow chocolate bunny here but I want a full on, 20lb solid chunk of chocolate here! Give me more darn it!

You say she has an impeccable fashion sense. What does that mean? Is it just her who thinks that or do other people agree with her? What exactly do you mean by ‘witch dress’? There are some parts of her that you really dive into, like her hair, brooch and eyes and then some things that I just feel like have been completely glossed over. Your profile is the place where you’re free to dumb all the wonderful detail and description that you aren’t able to cram into your posts. It’s the place that people go to get to deep dive into Eudora and get to know here 100%.

So, let’s take a break from her appearance and have a looksie at her personality. Just from glancing over it you can tell that Eudora is supposed to be kind of an odd duck. Eccentric yet reserved, introverted but with desire to help with the downtrodden and picked on. Now, if you had thought I was going to step down off my high horse about detail, you were wrong. I’m a junkie for information, what can I say? I would love to see you really delve into some of these things and explore Eudora a bit further. She seems like such a cool character and I just want to see you give her the attention she deserves okay?

So, let’s focus a bit on these eccentricates shall we? So, you did touch on these a little bit. Her love of fashion, her monologues, her random singing the way she challenges students in odd ways. I want you to explain these more. Why does her interest in fashion count as something odd? Is it obsessive or is it because she’s into odd things? Or maybe she just wears old things, I mean, she is 80, does she still wear things that were popular when she was younger? What about the things like her singing and monologues? How does she feel about them? Has she embraced them or does it bother her at night as she wishes she could be a little bit more normal.

Really, in her personality you have a lot here you can build on and take off with. My desire is to have you really delve into some of the little things. How does she feel about her age? What about herself in general? Does she have friends and how does she interact with them? What about the depraved youths of wurr? What are her dreams and passions? What is her worst nightmare? What is her favorite snack to have during a sleepless night when she sneaks into the kitchen? Gimme more, gimme more, gimme more. Make that your new mantra. Don’t be afraid to go crazy with the littlest of things and go deep into Eudora.

So! Our last top on this trip around your dear Eudora will take us through her history. Props to you because I found this really interesting. Due to just the wibbly wobbly way the timeline is, I don’t see just a whole lot of people really connecting characters to IRL things. I also like how you weren’t afraid to touch on things like religion. It really adds to her as a whole and lets us peak into her life and how this maker her, her. Out of all your pieces, I think this is where you have the best foundation and the most to really work with. If you explore this more, everything else should fall into place. A person’s history is what really plays a part in shaping them, after all.

It’s not perfect though, so let’s tear it apart a little bit. I’m not really going to focus on dates and things. Yes, our timeline is weird but if you think you can handle it and make it work, then by all means, go for it. Now, I would like to say that I feel as if once you get into her time in Hogwarts, home life gets kind of glossed over. Why does her father want her to go into the healing career? How did it effect the family when she does what she wants and disregards them? Do they end up supporting her or disowning her? WHAT ABOUT THIS ACCIDENT YOU MENTION? I’m so curious here, it’s absolutely killing me. What happened that made it so polarizing to the other students. I know you have 80 years here to cover, which can be quite a bit, but I want to see you pick up on some of those and really flesh them out. Give us more recent history too. I know that can be hard without plots and things but as you hang around here more that shouldn’t be such a problem as things fall into place.

So! To sum it all up, I would say you have a pretty firm handle on Eudora but you also have a way to go as far as depth and detail. I encourage you to really explore things here. You have some fun stuff that you can work with here. Dig into that personality, give us some more in her history, flesh out that rough sketch of her appearance into a painting by Leonardo da Vinci. Don’t be afraid to maybe even do some research into more events that might have happened during that time period and think on how that might have affected her. Have fun with it.

Now, with all this said and done, I am going to approve @Eudora Spitznogle for Beginner! I look forward to see where she goes! Good luck with your next reviewer.

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Blyssenor Wright
 Posted: Jul 12 2017, 04:36 PM
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"CATCH ME I'M FALLING"

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Blyssenor Wright
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Bubble! Hi and hello, I am Alice and I will be your second and final reviewer. smile.gif Puzzles has already ensured that you met the minimum requirements above, so let’s dive into your beginner application and get started.

Eudora is such a vibrant and unique character! I can say, without a doubt, that I have not seen a character like her on WR in my several years on board. She is incredibly refreshing and a joy to read, as these sorts of interactions are typically very minimal. It makes me happy to see how proactive you are with her as a Professor, as well as how much you are branching out to provide more opportunities for the other Hogwarts staff characters.

As I read through both your posts and profile, the first thing I noticed was consistency, something that is always a necessity. Consistency can sometimes be difficult when you’re first learning a character and feeling out their personality, but it’s clear to me that you’ve invested quite a lot of time and effort into working out the quirks that make Eudora who she is. In her profile, you describe her as someone who loves fashion and - true to form - I see her think about or mention fashion in nearly every single one of your posts. You even added into her history that she throws staff parties - something you have posted right now - for her fellow staff members.

Overall, for both portions (posts/profile) you seem to have a phenomenal foundation. You write Eudora well and she already has a distinct voice that I can practically hear in my head. You cross your t’s and dot your i’s in your profile sections, though I will agree with Puzzles that your history section is by far the most well-developed and informative. I don’t have much to add to what Puzzles asked for in your profile, though I will encourage you - if you value brevity - to simply detail enough to give us a complete picture of Eudora. This is generally what newer members look at when plotting and with more details, even some that seem small or minute, you might open up opportunities that would have never come up otherwise. You’ve told me yourself that you have a good grasp on Eudora’s character thanks to time and the profile is a great place for you to show that off.

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Eudora continued to watch many colleagues and students come and go until suddenly she realized she had taught almost everyone she was now working alongside. For many years she had been the longest serving staff member, but she had never been the oldest until now.


I have to say that I love the above quote as it ends her profile history so nicely. It’s also a feeling and common theme that you have referenced multiple times in her posts. This is one of those instances where, as I will mention below, I would love to read more of her inner thoughts about such things in her interactions with other characters.

Your posts themselves flow nicely and the class that you have posted for potions is quite informative. My biggest suggestion here is to err on the side of writing more introspection for Eudora. What you’ve shown us here is more action-based - which RP is that way, of course - but aside from a few lines, I feel like we’re missing out on what else could be running through Eudora’s mind at the moment. I saw the most of this suggestion in your thread with Elizabeth, but I’d love to see that branch out even further.

When it comes to your actual descriptions, you do a good job of shaking things up a bit when you refer to Eudora. Using things such as The Professor and the elderly witch. I challenge you to take that maybe one step farther! You could use things such as The former slytherin, the Slytherin Head of House, The former snake, the red-head, the frizzy-haired witch, the fashionista, etc. Just different ways to vary your writing so that it doesn’t feel repetitive from post to post. I also want to expand this suggestion to other descriptions as well, such as colors - coal instead of black, garnet instead of red, or dark chocolate instead of dark brown. Those are simply examples, but they add a little spice to your posts and make them feel more descriptive without changing up your natural writing style.

I see very few grammatical or spelling errors, which means your posts read as well-polished and refined. Great job! Keep that up as you continue to move forward in the ranks.

Overall, I think it’s pretty obvious that I approve Eudora for Beginner. She is off to a great start and with some expansion on your profile and more introspection and descriptive choices in your posts, you should have no issues with Novice. I think you are consistent with her voice, at least in these few posts, so no complaints from me there. For your next application, plot-wise, I’d love to see some interactions with students. I have a feeling we are going to get some from her new familial relation on board, but even beyond that! Just to showcase Eudora’s characterization with a student away from the classroom setting.

As always, if you have any questions, feel free to reach out to me! smile.gif Have a wonderful day <3

@Eudora Spitznogle

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Eudora Spitznogle
 Posted: Aug 12 2017, 01:57 PM
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"Guess who's back in the house heels click-clackin' about"

AGE:
80
YEAR:
Potions Master
HOUSE:
Slytherin HoH
CLASH:
Headmistress
HEIGHT:
5'8"
STATUS:
Muggle-Born
POSTS:
166
Rep: 9 pts [ + | - ]

Eudora Spitznogle
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Awards: 26



Rank Applying For: Novice
At least three of your recent role play topics:

Plot Arc:
In Eudora's over arching plot arc that has just recently started, she is confronted with past prejudice of being a muggleborn. This begins with her interactions with Elias Deveaux, who is caught calling her and her nephew mudbloods. This sets her on the path of not only trying to root out prejudice in Slytherin House, but also drives her to prove once and for all that she is worthy of her magic.
Louder Than The Crack In The Bell
Days in the Sun

Staff Interaction
Sing for me farewell
in this topic, a group of staff members engage in the train battle in an attempt to rescue the students trapped on the train. This topic in particular showcases Eudora's 'battle magic,' in other words how she would approach a duel or magical combat.

Staff Party
In this topic, Eudora is throwing her annual staff party for her fellow faculty members.

Student Interaction
Howling at the Moon
In this topic, Eudora meets with a former student whose life was tragically taken after one of her classes. The incident affected her deeply and this topic will eventually allow her to find some closure.

New arrival
In this topic, Eudora greets her newly orphaned nephew at Hogsmeade station and proceeds to get him settled into his new life at Hogwarts.

Hoodwinked
In this topic, Eudora stumbles across some students breaking curfew and possibly a life-threatening situation.

Cabin in the Woods
In this topic, Eudora is one of the CAMP counselors and leads her students to their cabin. Plus shenanigans.

Classes
NEWT Class
Potions Class

Clash
Colder than this home
In his topic, Eudora, as Headmistress, is visited upon by the head of the Viridian Guild.

Ability: Pet Augurey
What type of ability is this? Unique pet
Please describe the ability and what it will entail: Augureys, also known as Irish Phoenixes are large buzzard-like birds who are able to predict the weather. As not much else is known about them, I am taking their relation to the phoenix literally (as a branch of the same species or even as a subspecies.) Similarly to their fiery cousins, augureys would presumably be immortal, bursting into a cold blue flame on their burning days and being reborn from the ashes. They would also have the ability to carry immensely heavy loads. Unlike the phoenix, however, their tears would not have any healing properties and they have an almost entirely carnivorous diet (consisting mostly of insects and fairies.)
Where will this ability apply? Both
How does this ability fit into HP and WR canon? The augurey is a magical bird from HP canon, I merely expanded on their traits using established knowledge of the phoenix.
How will this ability benefit your character? Or how do you plan to use this ability for development? The augurey will serve primarily as a stand-in for Eudora’s current pet, Prudence a great grey owl who is advanced in age and is going to die soon. Having a pet with abilities like the augurey will help tremendously when I start Eudora’s literal journey to prove her magical prowess in the next few weeks.
Anything else?

Commentary: Since my last review, some of the things I’ve tried to work on are maintaining the consistency the reviewers saw last time, but I also tried to find new situations to put Eudora in. One of the bigger steps I made was to give her a nephew which, at her stage in life, is a massive new challenge because now at 80 she is having to learn to be a stand in parent.

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Aleksander Daskalov
 Posted: Aug 12 2017, 02:23 PM
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"The bloodbath of Bulgaria, the bastard of Ballycastle."

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Blyssenor Wright
 Posted: Aug 24 2017, 10:50 PM
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"CATCH ME I'M FALLING"

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GRYFFINDOR
CLASH:
CUPCAKE
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STATUS:
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Rep: 34 pts [ + | - ]

Blyssenor Wright
© ALICE // SHE/HER
Awards: 9



Hey Bubble! It's Alice, back again for reviewing round two ;) This time it's for novice and I will post those requirements below for reference.

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what we’re looking for at novice

  • At least 9 posts by your character over 3 threads.
  • Some variation in who you're posting with (ie. threads should not all be with the same character).
  • The beginnings of a long-term plot arc, or at least an idea of where you would like to see your character move towards.
  • A special request (if you'd like one) and your justification for the request. Make sure to highlight any changes you have made between Beginner and now.
  • At Novice, we are focused on consistency in character and writing.  At this stage, we will take a break from your profile, and look solely at your character’s threads and plots, with a focus on your character as they have now had time to interact with others. Having had time to develop your character, you should be comfortable writing some common situations they find themselves in. Grammar, spelling, and punctuation should also be consistently correct at this stage, if not always perfect.


All of those are met! So let's jump right into things and get going. If anything sounds funky, please bear with me. I am currently in a car on my way to Chicago. We leave for LA in the morning. My brain is a little fried tongue.gif

I am a huge fan of the new situations that you put Eudora in for this rank. We got to see different sides of her, ones that showcased her depth and the strong character building that you've been working on. Especially in her thread with Elias which, let me tell you, I was not expecting that at all. I knew going in what the situation was because of your little blurb but I was pleasantly surprised by how well that situation went down. In truth, I could gush about it, because it's so refreshing to see the tables being turned. A student picking at a Professor with blood prejudices. To see that actually threaded out is amazing. Props to you and Jynx!

The intensity was AWESOME! This one of those situations though where I would have loved to see some more introspection. I've definitely seen more of that in all of your threads, but here I think stepping it up even another notch could have really brought her emotions alive for the reader. Maybe even something along the lines of "For a moment she was the young slytherin girl again, staring ahead with wild eyes, feet planted against the sooty stones of London's streets. Her father's tormentors ahead of her, the screaming piercing her ears and yet instead of pain, she could feel only satisfaction. Justification." I dunno, that's just something I'm throwing out there but jwelrkjwer such a good place for storytelling and flashback which would make Eudora think and would bring more reality to what Eudora experienced rather than telling us.

That said, I know that that sort of style is not for everyone so my suggestion is certainly not an end all be all. That's just what you inspired me to think of and what I was hungry to see as I read those posts in that thread. Even still, you wrote everything with great descriptive detail and her emotion still shined through enough that I had to keep going, had to see what was happening. SO. Needless to say, I am all on board for this arc. I think it's brilliant to bring back something that has driven her for years and years in such a unique way and to force her to look at things more constructively rather than passively. Or, rather, looking at the blood prejudices in the context of her position and what she can do to stop it now that she is Head of House.

Throughout all of your posts I have noticed some phenomenal imagery and some expansion on descriptors like I mentioned in your beginner review, which is great. With the presentation of so many different scenarios and people, we have really begun to see how complete Eudora is as a whole character. My biggest worry here, however, is that while you have several posts and several different threads and ideas, the actual threads themselves seem to be sparse with replies. Which, I definitely get that you can't control when people reply. Sometimes things happen for others in real life and they get held up, etc. But when you go up for intermediate, we are really looking for these threads and their concepts to be well fleshed out. Not complete - heck that's hard to do in the best of times. But to get far enough that it shows a bit of that development that you are actually using the thread for. And of the threads you've presented, the threads with Ezra and Elias are the ones that were the most developed to me. So please keep that in mind as you go up for intermediate and if necessary, take a little more time to make sure those threads show enough development.

Also, can I just giggle over Eudora asking a house elf for Vodka? Not to mention the interaction between her and Joshua?! That's just a great basis for some serious heartache and development and gaaaah I want to see more of it. -flails at-

At this point, I'm not going to keep rambling - although I could - and let you know that I approve Eudora for Novice. You've got great consistency and characterization. That much is clear to me. Heck, it was clear to me at novice. Now, as you go up for intermediate, please keep in mind what I said about the development in the threads. Also, maybe challenge yourself to take a show vs. tell approach when it comes to some more emotional threads for Eudora? I feel like you could do that so dang well!! Otherwise, great job Bubble =D This whole app and the threads were a great read so thank you for that.
As for your special request, this is definitely reasonable to me as it is a precedent set in canon HP lore with a phoenix. For Intermediate, I would loooooove to see a thread where the Augury is the star of the show. Maybe even showcase some difficulties Eudora might have from keeping such a pet? I think that would work. smile.gif I approve your special request!

I think that's all for now! As usual, if you have any questions, please reach out to me. <333

@Eudora Spitznogle

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Erik Dwight
 Posted: Sep 12 2017, 02:20 AM
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"I'll be your breath if you can be mine."

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Hello Bubble, I'm Tine and I hope you do not mind that I chime in here and snatch the review away to spare you with more waiting time. First of all I am incredibly sorry, because I know what it's like to wait for so long, how nerve-wrecking it can be. Therefore I hope I won't disappoint you with this review and dive straight in your posts. Alice has already done a lovely job, so let's see what I can do for you.

I am going to be a little unconventional and start with your special request before digging in a little deeper. I agree with Alice that there are no issues with how such a pet would fit in the Harry Potter canon, and I don't see why Eudora wouldn't have a rather eccentric pet. I would also love to see a thread with the Augurey if you choose to go for Intermediate, but that is my only requirement, so I am going to APPROVE your request already <3

While reading through your threads, I will go through them arc by arc and try to put together some general things about your writing and plotting afterwards, just so you know how I am structuring this review. A little thing ahead of it all - which you do not have to acknowledge, but which came to my mind while taking a look at your app - is that you could think of naming your arcs. I know this is something you need to have a preference for, but it is always nice to see a little title. If you are more into the clear and straight-to-the-point style, feel free to ignore this, as it was just an idea for further ranking :3


Plot Arc:
Wow, one could really say this arc starts with a bang, and I am intrigued. I am always a sucker for conflict, and this is some amazing conflict to start with. You are touching very sensitive topics in the thread with Elias, yet I want to point out that you do it in a great way of sticking to the rules and guidelines, without making your reader uncomfortable - which is skill, I want to say. I really enjoyed how enraged Eudora is here and how you trigger her memories of her youth - which, for a character of his age, is something really important in my mind. I think Alice commented on more introspection, but I would also like to see more physical reactions - you do describe her movements and her environment, but I want the trembling, the pain in her throat, the blush of rage (if she does blush in rage, I do not know this).

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Her sweeping black robes lashed behind her giving the appearance of a storm cloud thundering down the corridor, holding a student hostage.


You have such a great imagery and I love how Elias calls her a batty woman, because she really appears to me like a bat straight out of hell in this thread.

I also like that you start building these arcs by continuing her thoughts and having Eudora think about the happenings with Elias more. I do not blame you for threads not having progressed as far as you might have wanted to, as it is often out of our hands. I personally try to make sure that I am always the last person who replied when I go up for ranking - unless it is a finished thread, of course. Just a small tip for the future. But I know you waited quite a while so if you did not want to add replies while being up for ranking, I totally understand it. Thanks for making sure I will have "Days in the Sun" stuck in my head all day.


[i]Staff Interaction:

I just want to start with dropping a quote here because you have some real beautiful descriptions:

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The lush Scottish countryside was in absolute upheaval, patches of mud shown through where trolls had collapsed and swarms of centaurs had galloped through; the air smelled of earth and unmucked stables; and above the hiss of the train as it idled and the commotion before them, Eudora could hear the screams of the students trapped just yards away.


There is not much to say about the battle thread as it has not quite progressed either, but I do like how Eudora immediately seems to take charge - and her thoughts about the centaur are simply hilarious. You do very well in integrating parts of her history and personality into Eudora's post, which I think of as important as Novice, as we do not have a profile to rely on. One of those little details I adored was this one:

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"Miss Be- Chai, my dear, so glad you could make it," Eudora was trying to break the habit of calling all her coworkers by their last name. At least at parties. She had been addressing everyone by their last name for so long that she was finding the habit a little difficult to break.



Student Interaction:
My first question for the Wolfbane thread was wondering why she is brewing it? For her upcoming lesson? Just because she can? Sometimes a little more context is perhaps a good idea, because I was a little confused about the situation in this thread. Generally you always do explain the circumstances - such as the muggle telephone - so it's not a big issue, just something I stumbled upon c:

I love the Christmas memories! Oh my, I want more of this because it is so adorable ;-; Out of all these, I think the thread between Ezra and Eudora is one of my absolute favourites, because it is so greatly executed and we see a different side of Eudora, which is beautiful. Hopefully, you are given the chance to have more of such threads, because family threads are beautiful, and I want to see how these two progress <3

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The rising sunlight creeping through the windows seemed like the hand of Satan clawing at Eudora's face as she lay peacefully asleep in her bed. Outside the birds were tweeting, but their song was a eerie and unsettling while trolls frolicked in her garden, cursing joyfully into the morning.


Legit how I wake up to. The summer camp thread was wonderful, I loved it.

For a professor who is up for ranking, classes are always important, and I love your consistent replies on your threads, as it makes sure your class keeps running. I see you did not reply quite as often to the Amortentia class - I always try to chime in every three posts or something like that to keep it going, but I know classes just die down sometimes.


Clash:
I am really looking forward to Eudora's involvement in clash, because it is one of my favourite parts of wurr. This thread already looks quite promising to me, and you know I have been reading the VG Wedding, of course.

Some general formalities concerning layout of posts - and I am sorry if I do sound overly picky now, but those are just suggestions I hope will help you ;_; - would be that you do not have to put your dialogue in bold. On the current skin, it doesn't show as much, but I remember in summer that I was often confused towards why it was bold now. I like that you link certain locations to give an impression of the room, but it shouldn't replace your own description in your own words - which it fortunately isn't doing right now. Tags within the posts aren't that much of a good idea, although I saw you only did it in class - still, I personally think it is better to leave them at the end of your post. You know, that makes people read your whole post ;)

What I would love to see in the future is definitely a situation where Eudora cannot be in control - much like the one with Ezra, as she couldn't determine her niece and nephew would die. She always seems to be ahead of the game - as the oldest professor, the camp counselor, the professor and Head of House. Even in clash, she is in control because she is the headmistress of Hogwarts. So, to push the development as an old lady, I would like her losing control. Be it by getting in a problematic situation or by losing her wand - although that shouldn't be as much of a problem for her.

Arc-wise, I suggest you do not separate them by students-staff-others, but by the way they proceed forward. The Ezra thread could have fitted the arc you called Plot Arc etc., so for Intermediate, think of a more timeline-wise organisation of your app. I am also going to echo Alice concerning the length of your threads. We know that receiving replies it out of our hands, but if you wish to rank further, getting at least three replies on most threads would be desirable - it simply helps to see where you want to go. If you can achieve the same in two replies, wonderful - just try and make sure that the direction is clear, and whether a thread that only has one reply really adds to the impression you want us to have of Eudora.

Generally I think you write Eudora really great - I can basically hear that quirky old woman, as she has a very distinctive and consistent voice. I did not find any major typos or grammar mistakes I would hint on, and you always give your partners plenty to work with. As for her voice - and this is something I noticed during the wedding, which is not part of your ranking and yet something I want to comment on - it is very authentic that the old lady has no filter. But please make sure that if she goes in a more vulgar direction (and imagine me taking a look at the IC quotes now) that you give a short warning at the beginning of your posts, as this can quickly become uncomfortable for those who read your threads.

There could be more internal thoughts - but couldn't there always be more? Keep doing what you do, because you really do a wonderful job with Eudora, and she is indeed a unique character on wurr. You have such a widely spread vocabulary and a wide range of different characters, which is amazing to see. As you see, my suggestions are more technical than really adding to your writing, because I really enjoyed reading these threads <3 Therefore I'm going to stop talking now as you waited long enoughand APPROVE you and @Eudora Spitznogle for NOVICE. Congrats! If you have any questions, feel free to hit me up on skype or pm me <3

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